The Battlefield

by Francine

Most of the wood my brother’s and I played in was recently bulldosed down. I walked across the bones of the gentle giants, pines, elms, buckeye, birch,oak, paw paw, all of my friends lay dead.Their bare, wirey, sharp, brown remains spread into a wide long path of tangled death. I walked upon the corpses with bare feet, my blood mixed with theirs.
The slaughtering lead me to a trail I was unable to see through the thick tangle of arms before.I follwed the trail until I came to a wooden bridge spread across a small creek. I crossed the bridge into a large, bright green field. I had seen this field from a distance, I would marvel at it’s beauty from afar since it was impossible to get to it through the thick forests and high cliffs.Yet now I had found a way.I sat in this field all day and all night.I was grateful for the green grass after a long, cold winter. I stared at it and ran my finger’s through the grass like lover’s hair.I looked into the graceful blue sky until it was speckled with the evening’s stars.

Comments

  1. The Battlefield

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 5 months ago

    I like your descriptions, and the blood mixing with the corpses, like the protagonist knew the trees personally. I was not ready for the switch, emotionally, to the grassy meadow. It was a sad, stark piece and then suddenly a romantic, happy one. I like how the bridge separates the two worlds, I think you could expand on this idea. :)
    LoA

  2. The Battlefield

    Francine's Buddy Icon Francine

    Posted 5 months ago

    [: thanks very much for you’re feed back, I will deffinately incorporate it into a sequel if I write one.

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