I Think He Really Meant It This Time

by thebetweenspace

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“Actually, it’s sort of not,” I said.

Lurch hovered over me awkwardly, a look of concern etched across his pockmarked face.

“If it was me,” Lurch said. “I’d go after the girl. Give it one last shot. But, then, you’re not me.”

With that, he was gone. I wanted to bury my face into about a half-gallon of Ben & Jerry’s. But inside something catapulted me toward the duck pond. I sprinted down the hall.

Lurch peeked out of his room to yell, “No running in the halls!!!”

“No time to talk,” I said, hoping to get to the duck pond in time for what promised to be an epic showdown between my two friends.

When I got there I saw Jodi, staring smugly at the two neanderthals as they squared off.

Not bothering with pleasantries, I asked her, “What did I miss?” as if I had just gone to the bathroom and wanted to make sure I hadn’t missed an essential moment of a movie.

“Everybody’s in love with me, which is great.” She smiled. “But Mendez just called Tom a nancy-boy. And I think he really meant it this time.”

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  1. I Think He Really Meant It This Time

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    This is your finest work, tbs. In a word, perfect!
    Favorite lines:“If it was me,” Lurch said. “I’d go after the girl. Give it one last shot. But, then, you’re not me.” and “Everybody’s in love with me, which is great.” She smiled. “But Mendez just called Tom a nancy-boy. And I think he really meant it this time.
    Plus the part where Lurch ducks his head back into the hall for admonishing him to stop running was priceless.
    LoA

  2. I Think He Really Meant It This Time

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 7 months ago

    Yeah, those were my highlights as well! By the way, I just did a little rewrite on the 2nd ficlet in this series, hinting at exactly who answered Jodi’s phone when Jordan first called to ask her out.

  3. I Think He Really Meant It This Time

    uselessness' Buddy Icon uselessness

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I love the reverse-retcon you did. :-P Working on a sequel…
    LoA

  4. I Think He Really Meant It This Time

    uselessness' Buddy Icon uselessness

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    And there it is. The you-know-what is finally hitting the fan.
    LoA

  5. I Think He Really Meant It This Time

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 7 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Great line for Jodi, quite telling. Makes you wonder what else she gets out of all this mess.

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