And the Rain Fell

by Artist_Girl

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The gloom fell around like a heavy, wool blanket. My sister sat beside me under her cheerful yellow umbrella, but we weren’t together. She was oblivious to anyone, especially me, texting some unknown friend or lover.
I stuck my foot out from it’s protection under my black umbrella. I watched giant raindrops fall on my barefoot, then slide down around my ankle.
My sister and I had started our love for rain when we were young. When the rain would begin to fall, we’d pick up an umbrella and head outside. The rain was our friend, our companion in our world of make-believe and pretend. But things do change. I guess we grew tired of each others company. I now just grabbed a book, and she had her phone. There was no need for each other now.
And the rain continued to fall.

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Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

  1. And the Rain Fell

    curlyfry505's Buddy Icon curlyfry505

    Posted 2 months ago

    This story is very heartwarming for siblings!

  2. And the Rain Fell

    Laine P. Grey's Buddy Icon Laine P. Grey

    Posted 2 months ago

    Hmm, very nostalgic. I really enjoyed this.
    P.S. watch for spelling.

  3. And the Rain Fell

    Kitty Pom-Pom's Buddy Icon Kitty Pom-Pom

    Posted 2 months ago

    3.0 out of 5 stars

    This was a good story!

  4. And the Rain Fell

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 2 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Kind of melancholic, but a very good job giving a sort of ebb and flow of warm and sad feelings over the course of such a short ficlet.

  5. And the Rain Fell

    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted 2 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Nice descriptions and emotion in this. Short, but sweet. Like Laine, I’m a little nit-picky over grammar, spelling, and general aesthetically-pleasing formatting on ficlets, but this had enough in it to make me not really care.

  6. And the Rain Fell

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I agree with Stovohobo’s comment. I care a lot about proof-reading, so I recommend reviewing your work after you post it. For some reason, I don’t always catch my mistakes when I’m in edit mode, but the second I hit publish and review it, the mistakes are right there, super obvious.
    However, this piece is beautiful enough in its story to transcend its few mistakes.
    LoA

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