Warmth Extinguished (One More Word Challenge)

by [pens&feathers]

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Cold.

The wind.

It felt cold.

I just stood there.

I just stood there, cold.

It was like warmth died.

Extinguished like a candle, a lightbulb.

Gone from the world – dead, extingished, gone.

And I just stood there in the cold.

The cold, the icy absence of warmth gripping me.

Whistling through the place where my heart used to be.

Where the feelings used to go, the warmth used to fit.

The warmth, which burned inside of me and shone through my eyes.

Now it’s dead and my heart is a hole the wind whistles through.

I stand rooted, feeling nothing but the cold filling up hollow spaces inside me.

The warmth is a memory, lost, extinguished, gone, and I will never know it again.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Warmth Extinguished (One More Word Challenge)

    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted 5 months ago

    Your metaphors are so deep…Siiighh. Nice repetition, too.

  2. Warmth Extinguished (One More Word Challenge)

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 5 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Beautiful imagery, and I especially like the repetition of certain words and phrases throughout the piece, which fits in with your theme of memory.
    LoA

  3. Warmth Extinguished (One More Word Challenge)

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 5 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Lovely job on the challenge. I liked the smooth transition from literal to metaphorical.
    LoA

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