Rattled

by Ana Cristina

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I smiled lazily and slung a friendly arm around her neck. “Who’s my date? You are, silly.”

She quickly slid out from under my arm and smiled at me. I noticed that the smile didn’t quite reach her eyes.

“Yeah, well you should have asked me if you wanted to come with me,” she sniffed. I’d never seen her look like this.

“I, uh, I’m sorry, Marjorie,” I stuttered, slightly taken aback. Trying a new tactic, I straightened my shoulders and said in a solemn voice, “Will you do me the honor of being my prom date, Marjorie Henderson?”

A real smile spread across her face, lighting her green eyes and making her freckles jump. There was a wistful quality to that smile though that made me feel somehow nervous.

“I’m sorry, Jon. I already have a date.”

“Who?”

“You don’t know him. He’s a sophomore.”

Her voice was so cool, so measured that I wanted to grab her and shake her, shake her until she felt as rattled as I did in that moment. And it was in that moment that I realized I was in love with Marjorie Henderson.

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  1. Rattled

    J.B. Williams' Buddy Icon J.B. Williams

    Posted 5 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I see. I would hate to be him at the prom. Nothing really gets a guy like a girl dancing wildly with another guy when he likes her.

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    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 5 months ago

    Jealousy, good point, JB, maybe he should stay home….

    Great realization, though I guessed it from the first ficlet. :)

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    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 5 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    A real smile spread across her face, lighting her green eyes and making her freckles jump. Great line. I love the idea of the smile making her freckles jump. Poor guy.

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    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 5 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Ouch. That’s what he gets for waiting until the last minute. Very playful exchange, perhaps hinting that she knows more about what’s going on than is readily apparent.

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    Blusparrow's Buddy Icon Blusparrow

    Posted 5 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    that stinks a lot. Yeah, he should of asked her earlier. I like how you give some kind of moral, you never know what you have till it is gone. Thanks again for entering.
    LoA

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