Marcello's [Realization challenge]

by J.B. Williams

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I sure know how to pick ‘em, I thought. Every time I like a girl she has some problem worth duly noting. As I thought this, she started to yell, whine and complain about the pasta, saying it tastes bland and that it wasn’t worth the trip (it didn’t matter that it was a date, that I actually liked the food, or that I paid for it) and that she should go home.

Why did I ask her on this date anyway? She’s rude, immature, slightly annoying, blunt, ungraceful, callous, trifling, tall, beautiful, toned, sexy…I see. The outside wrapping was so…tantalizing, so enthralling that I couldn’t help myself, opening Pandora’s Box, leaving my self respect to keep Hope company. I didn’t think that being shallow and uptight would actually be a hinderance, but oh well, I know what I gotta do now. “Well, it’s been fun. See you around.” “Where are you going? This date isn’t over!” “Sorry; I’ve just come to the realization that you disgust me. Goodbye.”

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Marcello's [Realization challenge]

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted about 1 month ago

    i think she just came to the realization that her beauty can’t carry her anymore :) Nice story! I loved the stream of thoughts!

  2. Marcello's [Realization challenge]

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I liked this a lot, too. Beauty can only take you so far, and you do a good job of showing that here.
    LoA

  3. Marcello's [Realization challenge]

    Blusparrow's Buddy Icon Blusparrow

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    You digust me! Lol! That was a good line! I hate some of my friends that complain it is really annoying. Good job and thanks for entering.
    LoA

  4. Marcello's [Realization challenge]

    NightMaiden's Buddy Icon NightMaiden

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    What a blunt answer! It made me laugh. This is a really good example of many people out there, unfortunately. Keep up the good work!

  5. Marcello's [Realization challenge]

    J.B. Williams' Buddy Icon J.B. Williams

    Posted about 1 month ago

    Worst part: based off a true story. I thought I was a douchebag at first for doing that, but then I remembered two things: 1) I am J.B. Williams and 2) It is an equal honor to be on a date, not one way. Oh well, her friends will know me as that a—hole. Thanks for enjoying the first part.

  6. Marcello's [Realization challenge]

    Blusparrow's Buddy Icon Blusparrow

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    wow it is real. I am glad you came to that realization then. =)
    LoA

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