Encounter

by Browncoatben

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He dropped fast. Real fast. Now crumpled on the floor, those eyes looking up at Tara. She still had the gun trained on the place he was standing, shaking.

She steadied her hand, safetied the gun and put it back into her purse very gently, never taking her eyes off of the man she had just killed.

What did he say? she thought. Father? But that was years ago.

“Dammit.” She cursed aloud, and crouched down beside his body. Reluctantly, she fumbled through his pockets…the pockets of a dead man.

Cigarrettes, lighter, watch, a wadded up piece of paper. Nothing else. She lit another smoke and unfolded the small piece of paper. A dry-cleaning ticket. What? She looked back at him, those filthy clothes. The eyes were still staring at her.

That’s when she noticed his clean shave and haircut. Tara stood, confused. She turned the paper over in her hand and noticed the handwriting.

Tara
Shed
7:30

Another tremor shook her. She was still holding his watch in her other hand.

7:34

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Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

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    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Very nicely written. The tension from earlier in the series continues to mount in this piece, despite the fact that Tara has just killed the old man and can now seemingly escape. The last section here in particular had me on the edge of my seat.
    Small correction – in your second paragraph, you wrote “yes” where I think you meant to write eyes.
    LoA

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    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    P.S. The first part of your profile was a forceful reminder of my favorite Talking Heads song. I trust this was written with that in mind? If not, it’s a crazy coincidence. ;-)

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    Browncoatben's Buddy Icon Browncoatben

    Posted 2 months ago

    Thanks for your kind words. Crazy coincidence it is…not familiar with the Talking Heads

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    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Once In a Lifetime by the Talking Heads. You should check it out—classic intellectual pop of the 80’s. Nice addition to the series, full of that sort of detached state of being and hesitant curiosity.

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    YodaOnCrack's Buddy Icon YodaOnCrack

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I wrote a sequel to this ficlet as well, but I like your better! Nicely done, Browncoatben – great visuals!

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    YodaOnCrack's Buddy Icon YodaOnCrack

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    This is not my beautiful house!

    This is not my beautiful wife….

    Letting the days go by…

    Yes, I used to listed to Talking Heads as well

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    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I love youtube! This is a live performance of the Talking Heads song. I love the lead-singer’s introductory pelvic thrusts and gyrations!

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BUgKb-5u6v4

    Great job on the sequel, by the way. You managed to keep the intensity even in the ‘relief moments’.

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    Browncoatben's Buddy Icon Browncoatben

    Posted 2 months ago

    C’mon…someone write a sequel! I’m dying to know what happens to Tara…but don’t wont to monopolize the story line.

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    Hunting Beauty's Buddy Icon Hunting Beauty

    Posted about 1 month ago

    You did a great job on this sequel. It kept me wanting more. Wondering what’s next.

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