Lifeless, Inches Away From You

by nesdil

I close my eyes and concentrate on the music pounding in my ears,
drowning out the gentle hum of the engine.
All my troubles seem to crash down upon me and I argue with myself internally,
trying to stop my mind from breaking down.
Exhausted from these relentless problems,
all I want is a release,
to let go of all the memories.

I become suddenly aware of a high screeching sound,
easily heard above the shattering music,
and my eyes fly open,
trying to locate source of the noise.
From the corner of my eye,
I saw a single car,
whirling out of its’ lane towards me.
Amazingly, as the car was spinning out of control,
I found a shred of happiness;
I would never survive the crash.
The cars’ back end spun around for a final time,
and the last image I processed was the terrified look on your face,
eyes wild and already losing life.
I reached out to touch you one last time,
but I heard the crash and saw the darkness swallowing me,
and my hand fell, lifeless, inches away from you.

Comments

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  1. Lifeless, Inches Away From You

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Well-described moment. Bit of a twist there with someone else in the car (?). Tragic and kind of romantic maybe.

  2. Lifeless, Inches Away From You

    KevMullins' Buddy Icon KevMullins

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Having been in one very serious car crash, I can say that you REALLY captured the moment.

    You start “super processing” during the event and time honestly slows down to the point where seconds feel like minutes.

    Great work!

  3. Lifeless, Inches Away From You

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I agree with KM, having been in a serious car crash as well. Very well described. Sad that the shred of happiness is locked into the thought of not surviving. Makes you wonder about the other person in the car.

  4. Lifeless, Inches Away From You

    Insert Pen Name Here 's Buddy Icon Insert Pen Name Here

    Posted about 1 month ago

    i love this. I’ve never been in a (serious) car crash, but this is beautiful and sad and it made me cry. Thank you so much.

  5. Lifeless, Inches Away From You

    Apostrophe 's Buddy Icon Apostrophe

    Posted about 1 month ago

    wow.. I like how you describe the horror of knowing you wouldnt survive the crash. Also the car spinning out of control and its last revolution being against your car. Incredible. You have captured this horrific situation right down to the nano seconds that its made of . The ending is tragic but expected. Job well done!

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