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by Chgowiz

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I jerked awake to The Voice, that horrid Voice that over the days? weeks? dominated my existence.

“Go-o-d can’t hear you!” the Voice said with that dry, nasty chuckle. I had come to know it as the bane of my existence and the source of my deepest terrors.

I was sure that The Voice was the Devil himself or an understudy who had a particular penchant for the most sublime of tortures. I could only hope that The Voice wasn’t talking to me.

I strained my ears, listening for any clue as to what horror the next moment might bring. I couldn’t see and hadn’t been able to since my arrival. On that day, I’d tried to blink and realized that they’d taken my eyes.

I couldn’t move. My hands were bound to my sides on some sort of contraption that left me in an almost crucified position. Immobile and blind, all I had was my hearing and my knowledge of what that Voice could bring.

The heavy footsteps echoed in their hollow fashion as The Voice walked away. My sigh was loud, but the quiet sobs from elsewhere were louder.

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Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

  1. Rapt audience

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Ooh, great job keeping up the creepy factor and even taking it up a notch or two. I appreciate this victim’s point of view. And you left it just open enough I think I can continue the series with this left in. Nicely done and thanks for adding a sequel!

  2. Rapt audience

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Since I went ahead and just kept the flow going off of yours, I thought I’d let you know a sequel is up. ‘Pretty Things’ continues.

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    Tad Winslow's Buddy Icon Tad Winslow

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    well written continuation. I enjoyed the footsteps of the voice walking away at the end, it gives me the sense that this thing is more substantial than just a voice and possibly more powerful, even though we can’t actually see it, we hear it’s heavy body hoof away.

  4. Rapt audience

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Another sequel is up, along down the line, and I finally used the line that you set up for me. Thanks again!

  5. Rapt audience

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 4 months ago

    yup, notched up the creep factor for sure.

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    Hunting Beauty's Buddy Icon Hunting Beauty

    Posted 4 months ago

    I agree with Kermitgorf and everyone else. You did a good job. You deffinately took the creep factor up a notch.

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    g2 (la pianista irlandesa)'s Buddy Icon g2 (la pianista irlandesa)

    Posted 3 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Not only could this be a victim’s point of view, it could almost be a dream/nightmare of Gordo’s. That’s how I see it, anyway.

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