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The old mime [make me laugh challenge]

The old mime sat on the park bench. Tufts of gray peeked out beneath his slightly skew beret. The clothes he wore were not quite threadbare, but they had seen at least a couple of years.

He was holding his head in his hands.

When he lifted his head, a little bit of white paint had come off and he was staring at it and shaking his head slightly.

Then the old mime saw the little boy standing in front of him. He’s maybe five years old thought the mime but I’ve never been good with age.

The little boy just stared at the mime. The old mime stared back.

Then, instead of doing the old stuck in a box or the rope pull actions, the little boy bent down and tied his laces even though they were clearly fastened with velcro strips. The old mime looked at his own shoes and saw his own laces untied. Quickly he tied them and smiled at the boy.

Just then a young woman walked up and called “Dennis, lets go home”

The old mime took the woman’s hand the walked down the gravel path. He turned and saw the boy laughing.

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The old mime [make me laugh challenge]
PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)
Posted 2 months ago

nirvana’d this one as well!
The old mime [make me laugh challenge]
thebetweenspace
Posted 2 months ago

Can’t an old mime get a little respect?
The old mime [make me laugh challenge]
Ridcully Calvert
Posted 2 months ago

This is my favourite of these stories thus far – the mixture of pathos and humour was superb
The old mime [make me laugh challenge]
Stovohobo
Posted 2 months ago

Aww…a sort of guilty pleasure by laughing. Feel sad for the mime but – he’s a mime.=)
The old mime [make me laugh challenge]
Alexa ♥
Posted about 1 month ago

It made me feel sorry for the poor guy.
The old mime [make me laugh challenge]
PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)
Posted about 1 month ago

Would you believe me if I told you that this ficlet was inspired by an episode of American Chopper.
And I don’t think the boy is laughing at the mime per se. Just that he got the mime to do something real and something as mundane as tying the shoelaces at that.
The old mime [make me laugh challenge]
Trann
Posted about 1 month ago

I’m with Pyro: I saw a boy not laughing at the mime but happy at his success in “speaking” mime.

At 5 (or so), that’s a great accomplishment.
The old mime [make me laugh challenge]
Ridcully Calvert
Posted about 1 month ago

Now you reallty have me chuckling – I saw that episode of A_C, and comparing Mikey to a 5 year old is dead-on

Hehehe (still chuckling)...