Sorry For What?

by Bring Out Your Inner Emo Kid <3

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“So can you contact her?” The officer asked us.

“Um…well, actually we lost all communication after they split.”

That was true but I wasn’t sure if he could see through our other lies, but he didn’t question us again. “Okay,” he said, scribbling a few notations on a clipboard he was holding. “Well, he said. “Let’s go see your father, shall we?”

I looked over at Hannah who had seemed to have become beet-red in the last fifteen minutes. We went up the elevator to the sixth floor until we reached a room, numbered 641.

Insided, it was stuffy and dusty. Like most hospital rooms, you could hear the beeping of the machines. I took a step inside, a figure was lying in the bed near the window.

“Dad?” My voice, only a meek whisper. When his face became visible, I realized that he was crying.

“I’m sorry, girls, forgive me.”

Sorry for what?

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Sorry For What?

    emma jo_234's Buddy Icon emma jo_234

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Good! I like it. The one part I am questioning is:
    “Um…well, actually, we lost all communication after they split.”

    I wasn’t sure if he could see through our lies -

    It’s just that they really HAVE lost communication with their mom, so having the bit about seeing through lies right after that line doesn’t make much sense to me. Maybe you could add, “That was the truth, but -”
    Well, whatever. It’s very good.

  2. Sorry For What?

    Bring Out Your Inner Emo Kid <3's Buddy Icon Bring Out Your Inner Emo Kid <3

    Posted 4 months ago

    Oh, yeah, sorry. I get it now. You’re right, I should fix it.

  3. Sorry For What?

    emma jo_234's Buddy Icon emma jo_234

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Great, it sounds better now. 20 *!

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