Stopping for Gas

by Krulltar

“Ally” John said as he tapped on the car window to wake her.

“It’s not the cleanest, but they take checks” he continued with a kooky grin on his face as he held up a hub cab with a chain and key hanging off it. She frowned back.

Ally stepped out of the car, and looked around. The gas station had 2 old men playing checkers. If it only had an old fashioned gas pump that said petrol it would be a perfect Norman Rockwell painting, she thought.

“Don’t tell me…we’re in Mayberry,” she said sarcastically taking the hubcab and heading toward the restroom. She didn’t like the way that sounded, but she was too tired to appologize.

She leaned on the sink and splashed water on her face. “Another bounced check so they can follow us“, she mumbled to herself as she dried her face and pulled her flowing blond hair into a pony tail. She stepped out of the restroom.

“The pickles broke open”, John said with his head buried in the trunk.

“Great. No more Gurkens.” She huffed as she got back in the car.

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 4.5 stars out of 5

  1. Stopping for Gas

    Hunting Beauty's Buddy Icon Hunting Beauty

    Posted 4 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    This one is good. I can see how she’d b a bit sarcastic after what they’d been through the day before.

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    Hunting Beauty's Buddy Icon Hunting Beauty

    Posted 4 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Alright…I got a sequel written.

  3. Stopping for Gas

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 4 months ago

    Nice ending line and a good job putting us in her state of mind here.

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    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I enjoyed the details in this one like the Rockwell and Mayberry references. I agree the ending works well in developing her state of mind.

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