The Sharp Teeth of my Bite (200 something challenge)

by Tad Winslow

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I AM …

I am December to the seasons.
I wonder how bitter I can be.
I hear the claw of bare branches.
I see Ice float in the sea.
I want to quiet warm hearts.
I am making you dead like me.
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I pretend to be nothing.
I feel your spine with a shiver.
I touch the root of vitality.
I worry of him, the life giver.
I cry snowflakes on saplings.
I am a gun in control of its trigger.
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I understand the night.
I say threats to the sun.
I dream of vanishing light.
I try to coil god’s hand, and make it go numb.
I hope to steal you away and have you tied tight.
I am forcing you to bleed with the sharp teeth of my bite.

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  1. The Sharp Teeth of my Bite (200 something challenge)

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Some really vivid, gorgeous imagery here. I love the first stanza in particular.
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  2. The Sharp Teeth of my Bite (200 something challenge)

    Blusparrow's Buddy Icon Blusparrow

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    O Very dark, black, gothic, and vampire. To me it is a different direction from what you usually do. I like it! Very boo!
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  3. The Sharp Teeth of my Bite (200 something challenge)

    Freedom's Buddy Icon Freedom

    Posted 3 months ago

    That’s really really good. Disturbing and dark. Vivid and well written. Thanks for entering!

  4. The Sharp Teeth of my Bite (200 something challenge)

    PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)'s Buddy Icon PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Very eloquent. Enjoyed the dark and gothic feel. well done.
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  5. The Sharp Teeth of my Bite (200 something challenge)

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 3 months ago

    great take on the challenge. Impressively large scope and feel.

  6. The Sharp Teeth of my Bite (200 something challenge)

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 3 months ago

    I try to coil god’s hand, and make it go numb> awesome line, Ilike that each sentence starts with I.. makes it personal

  7. The Sharp Teeth of my Bite (200 something challenge)

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    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    wow, this was REALLY good! I like it alot.
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  8. The Sharp Teeth of my Bite (200 something challenge)

    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted 3 months ago

    Each and every line in this is vivid and full of beautiful, haunting imagery. I don’t know why I keep being surprised by the sheer quality of the ficlets you write.

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