The Pillar - Corporal Blake

by Browncoatben

Corporal Blake’s entire body was tense. He was panting heavily, sweat beading from his head and fogging his HUD -visor. But it was gone. That thing. It had disappeared in a blazing flash of light.

He swiveled his chair to survey the room. The Port Gun Control Room was unchanged. Undamaged. But also empty. Phelps and Hendricks were gone. Only a HUD -visor lay on the floor, rocking gently as if someone had lightly kicked it.

“What the hell,” he muttered aloud, confused.

He turned to his console and pulled a status report. No damage to gun systems, no shots fired, GCR door locked from inside.

Activating his comm, he reported his situation. “Damage Control, Port Gun Control.”

Go..G…Go, GC. came a shaky voice.

“Systems nominal, DC. But Captain Hendricks and Corporal Phelps are MIA .” He looked around again. “They’re gone.”

Copy, GC. No instructions at this time.

Blake had never been alone in here before. It’s against Regs. It was too damn quiet.

And his eyes hurt.

Comments

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  1. The Pillar - Corporal Blake

    KevMullins' Buddy Icon KevMullins

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    WOW ! So I see you did work “Corporal Blake” into your evil plans. :)
    Perfect balance on the conversations here. Great flow.

  2. The Pillar - Corporal Blake

    JLaughter's Buddy Icon JLaughter

    Posted 3 months ago

    I dig it! Great stuff! I’ll jump in some other time, you keep it up!

  3. The Pillar - Corporal Blake

    Browncoatben's Buddy Icon Browncoatben

    Posted 3 months ago

    I’m really proud of the last line…really got me excited when I wrote it.

    Thanks guys!

  4. The Pillar - Corporal Blake

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Loved the line about not being alone cause it’s against regs, like that’s really the thing to be concerned about. But that’s how the mind works sometimes.

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    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    That was a great and very telling final line.

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