Picking Teams

by John Perkins

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Once Bruce had entered the navigation bridge and we were safely out of his sight line, I sat up and began cutting through the riot cuffs on my legs.

“What’s going on?” Jen could hear my attempts to break free, but could not see them as she was lying on her side facing away from the action. “Phil?”

“Well, right now Jen, I’m trying to get us out of here.” My pocketknife sliced through the cuffs and my legs were free. “But first I have a few questions for you.”

“What do you mean? Questions for me?” She tried to roll over, but her arms—tied behind her back—got in the way. So she twisted her head around to look at me. “What sort of questions? Phil come on, untie me before Bruce gets back.” I could hear a panic in her voice.

“Did you hear what Bruce said earlier, about us being traitors because we’re both alive?”

“Yeah, and?” A strained grunt escaped as she tried again to roll over.

“Well I’ve been thinking. I’m pretty sure I know why they let me live, but what I don’t know is why they let you live. Ideas?”

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Picking Teams

    JMSquire's Buddy Icon JMSquire

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Ah, gotta love a healthy amount of paranoia.

  2. Picking Teams

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 6 months ago

    If you read this from the beginning, you’d see that his paranoia is justified. His son’s life was threatened, and at one point his wife was kidnapped. It’s all part of the life, being a programmer for a super villainous organization.
    Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my story. It’s always appreciated.

  3. Picking Teams

    JMSquire's Buddy Icon JMSquire

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I read the whole thing, and I realize the seeds of mistrust were sown back during the melting soldier scene. Just trying to say that the written distrust of Jen makes me question her background just as much as the main character does. Great writing and I can’t wait to see where it all goes.

  4. Picking Teams

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 6 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Fun stuff and good job at the calmly, cutting dialog by our paranoid (justified, conceded) guy.

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    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 6 months ago

    @JMSquire, sorry, just promoting the rest of the series. =P Didn’t mean to come off as so defensive, but I think that’s kind of how it read. Sometimes people jump in during the middle of these things and miss the nuances of the characters, so I was just trying to give background. Thank you for reading through the whole thing though, that’s awesome!

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    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 5 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Ah ha. So, he’s wondering about her loyalty as well. And as for your comment banter above, I think a healthy amount of paranoia is justified in this series. (Great work all around from the three of you!)

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    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 4 months ago

    i hope this a complete series caz i like it

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