Zeus vs. The Bird (Out-Of-Order Challenge)

by Stovohobo

“Well, Zeus,” spat Jay condescendingly, “your luck holds out only for so long. This game is a deadly one, and that means that the stakes are that much higher. So are the means.”

The voice on the end of the line sighed with contempt and a dash of boredom. “Detective, your words can and will be used against you. Luck works for the both of us, and therefore, yours is temporary as well. Meanwhile, I can wait. Remember, my information on you is far superior to what you’ve got on me.”

Jay leaned away from the receiver. “Still no trace?”

“The phone’s independent,” one replied.

Jay held the phone back to his head. “All right, Zeus, tell me about myself.”

“With pleasure. Detective Robert E. Jay, officer in the Kane City Police Department. Worked for the Department for twenty years, with several colleagues. Namely, Lt. James Withburn, who happens to be…hung up at the moment.”

Jay immediately spun around in his chair. Lt. Withburn’s body hung suspended from the ceiling, slowly rocking back and forth.

Comments

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  1. Zeus vs. The Bird (Out-Of-Order Challenge)

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 4 months ago

    Ooh, that was unsettling and quick. How did that happen? Will have to read on.

  2. Zeus vs. The Bird (Out-Of-Order Challenge)

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I’m loving the character names here, especially Zeus, of course. This manages to be witty and slightly scary at once. I love the last two paragraphs.
    LoA

  3. Zeus vs. The Bird (Out-Of-Order Challenge)

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    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    YOU DEMON !!

    Brilliant….But you know me, I just like dead bodies.

  4. Zeus vs. The Bird (Out-Of-Order Challenge)

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    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Great start. Reading on.

  5. Zeus vs. The Bird (Out-Of-Order Challenge)

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Congrats! You won an award in this challenge!
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  6. Zeus vs. The Bird (Out-Of-Order Challenge)

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I forgot to tell you that when you go to the above link, go to the sequel, “part 2,” in case you don’t see your name on that page (I had to break up the eight awards into two ficlets).

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