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Out-of-Order Challenge - Opportunity

My heart was pounding. It thumped in my chest like a jackhammer in slow motion. The stairwell echoed my heavy footsteps as I made my way down to the first level. I had the duffel bag slung over my left shoulder…four hundred thousand dollars!

I cracked the door at the bottom and took a careful peak out. Pretty stupid, really. Anybody noticing would be suspicious. There was the Bronco, twenty yards away.

I’m not sure why, but I had to psych myself up to leave the safety of the stairwell.

Go!

I walked quickly toward the truck, fumbling with the keys. I noticed I still had the rubber gloves on. I pulled them off and threw them to the ground.

I swear my chest was about to explode.

That’s when I saw the Caddy coming down the ramp. June’s car. Going fast.

Too fast.

Way too fast!

She slammed into the Bronco, sending glass and metal flying. I ran up to the car buried into the side of my Bronco.

Blood. She was slumped over the dash. Dead.

I snatched the backpack and started running.

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Out-of-Order Challenge - Opportunity
JLaughter
Posted 4 months ago

These stories seem to be out-of-order.
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John Perkins
Posted 4 months ago

Even more money for our hero now that both of his accomplices are dead. Although, I’m guessing this won’t end well for him. And you did a good job of the misdirect from the first one where we thought they might get away safely.
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THX 0477
Posted 4 months ago

Very exciting continuation of the story, though I’m still laughing at the comment from I’m-THAT-Guy! Heck of a twist, certainly suggests something having happened on the upper deck. Brutal stuff.
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Ana Cristina
Posted 4 months ago

LOL at the first comment. You’d think he’d take the time to read the title, too.
LoA
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KevMullins
Posted 4 months ago

Wow, these are great!
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Browncoatben
Posted 4 months ago

THAT Guy is my brother…he’s giving me a hard time because of a comment I left on one of his stories.

Thanks for the encouragement, all!
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Stovohobo
Posted 3 months ago

Nice one…now we’re getting into even the more exciting bits, if possible.