Famous Last Words (Out-of-Order Challenge)

by thebetweenspace

When James fired his weapon in the air, two of the irate New Orleans Zephyr fans tackled him, trying unsuccessfully to pry the gun from his hands. As the three of them rolled around on the concrete, security arrived a few beats too late to restore order.

The bag of money flew into the air, showering everyone with cash. The gun fired, lodging a bullet into the the Coca-Cola tap, spraying highly pressurized carbonated soda all over the place. Reasonably well-mannered people began wrestling for all the Franklins, Grants, Jacksons, Hamiltons, Lincolns, Jeffersons and Washingtons at their feet.

What happened next was a mystery to everyone. The author of the chaos, somehow in the midst of the melee, managed to slip away undetected with the gun. Beaten down and bruised, he made his way upstairs to pay his former employer a little visit.

The door was closed. Knock. Knock. Knock.

“Come in,” Mr. Banks said.

“Famous last words,” James said, moments before unloading the rest of the clip on his former employer.

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 4.5 stars out of 5

  1. Famous Last Words (Out-of-Order Challenge)

    Sailor Emo's Buddy Icon Sailor Emo

    Posted 4 months ago

    O wow. NIce tension!!!!!!!!! And I get it!!! YAAAAY !!! GOLD STAR !!! sorry… X)

  2. Famous Last Words (Out-of-Order Challenge)

    Nissakit's Buddy Icon Nissakit

    Posted 4 months ago

    whoa! that was amazing, and it all makes perfect sense!!!

  3. Famous Last Words (Out-of-Order Challenge)

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 4 months ago

    Ouch, brutal ending, though it wound up kind of quick. Still, a fun scenario.

  4. Famous Last Words (Out-of-Order Challenge)

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    This was an awesome story, made even better with the sequence of events. Devastating in some parts, funny mostly throughout, overall one of your better stories. Well done!
    LoA

  5. Famous Last Words (Out-of-Order Challenge)

    Trann's Buddy Icon Trann

    Posted 4 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Man, you guys take baseball waaaay too seriously. ;-)

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