Home From Shopping

by John Perkins

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The limousine slowed as we approached a large, wrought-iron gate. It was flanked by two imposing brick pillars engulfed in ivy that had been aged by the winter months. A stoic guard lowered his head in acknowledgment as we passed through the gate. His shackles, barely exposed beneath the cuff of his pants, were chained to one of the pillars.

We continued along the cobblestone drive for a couple hundred yards. The grounds were a massive maze of grass and hedges, interspersed with the occasional fountain sculpture. At the end of the drive sat a three-story mansion, the most spectacular I had ever seen. Its portico, riddled with columns was a proud, toothy smile greeting visitors.

Two men, of average height and build, walked towards the limo as we pulled to a stop in front of the house. The unshackled one opened the door for my new owner. “Good morning sir.” His gaze shifted to the girl as she followed her father out of the limo. “Ma’am.”

“Take this one out back,” my new owner threw his thumb in my direction.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Home From Shopping

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Solid continuation, kept right in the style of the previous pieces. Nice job setting a mood and tone.

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    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Actually, this is barely any different than what I would’ve written. Great coninuation.

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    JMSquire's Buddy Icon JMSquire

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Great scene, for some reason houses with brick walls and iron gates have always scared me. I think you missed an ‘h’ in the third sentence, when the guard is lowering his head.

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    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 4 months ago

    Thanks for pointing that out JMSquire. Not sure how I missed it. I had to remove a comma to get it to fit though.

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