The Others-Failed Suicide

by Fantasy

She stood in the middle of the street, arms out, hair flowing in the wind, eyes closed…and feet firmly planted on the ground. A car was coming straight for her, and she knew it. Annalese was trying to kill herself.

In her mind, there was no other choice left. She had to do this. The strangest part was, the moment was so peaceful. The cool gentle breeze felt wonderful against her skin. The sound of the cars passing by on either side of her seemed so serene. There were no doubts in Annalese’s mind about dieing.

The car was coming closer and closer, speeding now. It was practically up to her. Her heart began racing.

Annalese felt something run into her body.

...But it wasn’t the car. It hit her side, pushing her out of the way of the car, just as it was about to strike. She opened her eyes as she hit the concrete sidewalk. Her brother was standing over her, out of breath.

“Jared!” She screamed, “Why did you push me out of the way?!”

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  1. The Others-Failed Suicide

    Nissakit's Buddy Icon Nissakit

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    That was good, hopefully it will become a series! great job! I loved the description of the calmnity of the moment.

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    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted 4 months ago

    Wonderful beginning; I’ll sequel now. (Sorry, I’ve been AWOL from ficlets for the past two or three days).

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    BernerOberland's Buddy Icon BernerOberland

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Amazing rescue.

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    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    You did a nice job of setting up these characters here. Her selfishness really shines through in that not only is she killing herself, but causing a car wreck in the process, which might kill many others. Good way to quickly add depth.

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