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Griselda

“Have the child sit still.” Doctor Mandrose spoke calmly into the microphone. He was tucked safely away behind thick mirrored glass.

Griselda’s attendants were covered head to foot with thinly lined asbestos suits. Her interior inhabitant could smell it. There was no use in wasting energy on an outburst. Still, her young human mind and body fought to be released from their gripping hands.

“Enough!” Commanded Griselda’s inhabitant. Her muscles constricted tightly. The attendants released her as she convulsed violently.

Griselda wiped away a tear from her cheek and looked directly at Doctor Mandrose through the glass. He clicked the microphone on again, “Griselda, let the man take your photograph.” He tried to keep the wavering from his voice, however unsuccessfully.

“Let them see,” hissed the inhabitant.

Griselda moved to the stool and sat, turning her face to the camera. The flash filled the room along with gasps of horror as a lingering image of the beast within remained on the child’s face.

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PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)
Posted 4 months ago

I’m fascinated by stories about homunculuses (homunculi?) As always you did an excellent job on this ficlet. Maybe I’ll even sequel – got a germ of an idea and need to let it grow a bit to fill 1024.
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Melia
Posted 4 months ago

Ok first? I freaking love the name “Griselda.” Perfect perfect name for the kid. Second, man this is creepy, a good creepy. I love the heck out of it. Seems almost like it’s either going to be a clinical attempt at exorcism with the asbestos suits and Doctor Mandrose, or else the Doc and company are going to perform insidious experiments on poor Griselda. Did I mention I love that name? :) – Either way, this is really outstanding.
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thebetweenspace
Posted 4 months ago

That was absolutely terrifying. I also feel Griselda is the perfect name for the poor inhabited girl. Great job capturing the picture and that last line was incredible.
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Krulltar
Posted 4 months ago

The oversized pupil in her right eye and hallow look of her features is frightening, but mixed in your Ambrose Bierce style story and I’m truely spooked. I love horror fiction, and I give is 11 stars out of 10 on the creepy scale, but on the flicet scale I can only give you 5. Thanks for an enjoyable story.
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Jenunique
Posted 4 months ago

You are all too kind. :D Thanks so much for the wonderful comments!
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Mighty-Joe Young
Posted 4 months ago

Oh my freakin gawd this story is the shiz nigh i love it what happens next? come on what could you have to do that is more important than finshing this?(eating working,feeding children, open heart surgery they are all hoosbah compared to this) oh yeah and pyro said humunculi hehehe, i loveit
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John Perkins
Posted 4 months ago

Creepy. But, like, totally awesome. Ya know?
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uselessness
Posted 4 months ago

That’s great and unnerving and awesome and very well-written! Love it!
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Ana Cristina
Posted 4 months ago

Yeesh! I winced when I saw that picture. Her eyes really pierce you. Your story was even more haunting, which is remarkable. Fantastic work, as usual from you. (You’re on a roll today, by the way!)
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BernerOberland
Posted 4 months ago

Creepy name for a creepy kid, told in a dark creepy manner, you can say this ficlet gave me ..yeah the creeps.