The New And Improved Model J

by thebetweenspace

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The old Jameson would have melted when Becca smiled at him like that. The new and improved Model J, however, ignored her and signaled the bartender instead. Becca would not be outdone, however. “So, is Paul ever gonna get here?” Becca asked. “I’m starting to think you’re up to something.”

“Funny story,” Jameson said. “I raced him here proving once and for all that the Vespa is mightier than the Ram.”

“You beat him here?” Becca asked, absolutely amazed.

“The best man always wins,” Jameson replied.

The bartender finally came over to take their order. “Welcome to Chili’s. Can I get you some drinks or an appetizer? How about a margarita?”

Becca started to order, but Jameson cut her off, “We’ll have a round of Presidente Margaritas,” he said. “And miss, shaken, not stirred.”

When the bartender returned with their drinks and shook the margarita shakers, the girls laughed, finally getting his joke.

They were practically eating out of his hand by the time Paul arrived, but Becca still had a plan.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. The New And Improved Model J

    Hunting Beauty's Buddy Icon Hunting Beauty

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Jameson is turning into quite the character. I love how he’s suddenly so cool and how Becca is trying not to be outdone. Great job on this sequel. Can’t wait to see it’s sequel.

  2. The New And Improved Model J

    Apostrophe 's Buddy Icon Apostrophe

    Posted 3 months ago

    Yes im dying to know what her plan is.. is she going to lead jameson on more?

  3. The New And Improved Model J

    Apostrophe 's Buddy Icon Apostrophe

    Posted 3 months ago

    Yes im dying to know what her plan is.. is she going to lead jameson on more?

  4. The New And Improved Model J

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Very silly and cheesy, but in a fun way though.

  5. The New And Improved Model J

    Krulltar's Buddy Icon Krulltar

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Great series, only one complaint: The pre-prequel The Tortoise and the Hare had Paul already talking with them at the table. Ana’s The Game slide back in the timeline a bit by having them sit at the bar as Jameson swaggered in. Not really noticeable, because of the great dialog going on.

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    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    Krulltar, that’s a good point so for continuity’s sake I went back to the Tortoise and the Hare and changed placed them at the bar rather than at a table.

  7. The New And Improved Model J

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    And I also inserted the bartender in place of the waitress in this one. :)

  8. The New And Improved Model J

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Crap, sorry to throw off the timeline, tbs. That’s sweet of you to fix it. I’m writing a sequel right now!

  9. The New And Improved Model J

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I took some advice from THX , Scott, and edited the sequel. It also helps pave the way for our idea. ;-)

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