yin and yang

by PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

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His heart in my pocket, tears on my chest,
had no idea what to do with the rest.
Could not just throw them in the rubbish bin!
The garden! The shed! The yang to my yin.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. yin and yang

    PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)'s Buddy Icon PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    Posted 4 months ago

    trying to keep it in iambic pentameter form, even though I find a iambic tetrameter much easier to read.

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    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 4 months ago

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    ok i think this is anapestic tetrameter instead of iambic,now before you fire at me,i say that because you can’t go by syllables because meter has to account for colloquial diction and dialect, for instance in mississippi where i am from the word shit which is one syllable can be a be a complete dactic foot SHHE EIH et where as mutherfucter which is four syllables can be pronounced in one throchaic foot, i see how you are counting it but it just feel like – - + triplet to me. loved it

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    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 4 months ago

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    hey i fixed that second line on the romeo and juliet, good looking out.

  4. yin and yang

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I really liked this. I’m a sucker for poetry, whether it’s iambic or whatever.

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