Numb

by brunettechick

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What could he have done? He was so numb that even the tears would not, could not, fall. There was no logic to it. How could someone become so cold that even when the sun shone brightly, a rain seemed to overcome. Emotions could only be described as absent and carelessness had become a habit. His spirit was broken, just like his heart, and he was unable to fix them. Had the pain been to much to bear, or had it simply become so routine that he could feel nothing else? The only thing he knew was that he wanted, even needed, to feel something.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

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    brunettechick's Buddy Icon brunettechick

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I need help! Please criticize this piece to point me in the right direction!! Thanks

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    Saint Chuck's Buddy Icon Saint Chuck

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Wow, I really like this one. Sadly it reminds me of me a few months ago. Sequel could be something with suicide/self harm…

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    Laine the Grey's Buddy Icon Laine the Grey

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    This was great. I could see this as an anime series for some reason…

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    AeroPen's Buddy Icon AeroPen

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I really like this.. I went through the same phase when my dad died. But I got over eventually… not quite sure how.
    The only thing I could think of is maybe saying “I” instead of “he,” just because it sounds more direct.
    But that’s just me. It’s your writing piece. Again, nice job!

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