Silence....

by S. Lynn

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- Renita-

The lake was quiet. I didn’t know how long I sat there, staring out into the lake. It was so peaceful, so relaxing… I might have even dozed off. I found a little path leading down the rockside and to the waterfront. It was wonderful down here. And there were little creatures in the water, but not fish. They swam in circles, never stopping for a second. Their gills shimmered with the water, and they seemed to almost fly, with their long fins. I followed one around the edge of the lake, and it seemed to have a look of great intellegence in it’s eyes.

Finally I remembered why I came down here. I hadn’t know how long it had been, nor had Carlene ever told me if she was coming to say to was all clear or not. I made my way back up the path, slowly going uphill and leaving the lake. It was quiet in the cave, too quiet. I finally made it to the entrance to find no one there.

“Carlene?” I whispered, hoping she was just in the shadows. Slowly I made my way out of the cave, looking out at the land.

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Average Reader Rating: 3.0 stars out of 5

  1. Silence....

    User 9616's Buddy Icon User 9616

    Posted 3 months ago

    The large slow rise coming out of the cave was always damp at this time of the day. The smell of fresh moss clung to the air as my breaths felt thicker than I could ever remember. There was an emptyness now in the forrest. A lack of something. Everything looked and felt exactly as it had a thousand times before, but nothing seemed the same.

    “Carlene?” A wave of anger rushed over my forehead as I was answered by nothing. I glanced over at the hollow tree. The calmness of the lake seemed so far away.

  2. Silence....

    Robotech_Master's Buddy Icon Robotech_Master

    Posted 3 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    There shouldn’t be an apostrophe in “it’s”. The apostrophe is only for contractions, such as “it is” or “it has.” The possessive is just “its.”
    Apart from that, very interesting descriptive passage. One wonders what the creatures in the water are.

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