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Hitman [Unexpected Twist Challenge]

Even though years in this business had caused his hands to develop a feel for money, acting as calculators based on the weight and size of a package, paranoia still caused Charles Shwaldy to count all the cash that changed hands in his extremely shady business meetings. He had just finished counting the five hundredth ten dollar bill when the man sitting across from him cleared his throat.

“So, you’ll kill that annoying old hag for me?”

Charles looked up from the cash and nodded. He tossed the roll of hundreds onto the old coffee table and sat back, getting comfortable.

“Yeah, I don’t see why not. Any specific way you want it done?”

“For insurance purposes,” the man wiped the sweat off his forehead, “could you make it some sort of painless accident?”

“Yes, of course.” Charles allowed himself to smile. They both stood and shook hands, Charlie headed to the door. His hand was on the knob when he turned, doubts were clouding his rugged face.

“If I kill Ma, who’s gonna cook Thanksgiving dinner this year?”

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Hitman [Unexpected Twist Challenge]
Ana Cristina
Posted 3 months ago

Funny and macabre at the same time. Nice last line! Thanksgiving should begin with a capital letter, though.
Hitman [Unexpected Twist Challenge]
Ana Cristina
Posted 3 months ago

Just so you know, I would have given you five stars but the rating system doesn’t want to cooperate.
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JMSquire
Posted 3 months ago

Fixed Thanksgiving, I will remember some day that dates and such get capitalized.
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John Perkins
Posted 3 months ago

Cool. Nice twist there at the end. Definitely wasn’t expecting it.
Also, I think you meant “onto the old coffee table,” rather than “unto the old coffee table.”
Thank you so much for entering.
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Six Feet Under The Stars
Posted 3 months ago

wow. amazing twist. i definitely didnt expect it.
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thebetweenspace
Posted 3 months ago

Very funny final line and a good, unexpected twist to boot.
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THX 0477
Posted 3 months ago

Great entry, fits the challenge perfectly. Love the gritty feel that slides perfectly into the darkly humorous ending.
Hitman [Unexpected Twist Challenge]
Mistress Elsha Hawk
Posted 3 months ago

Some supermarkets cook the turkey for you….....
LOL
Nice twist!
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Apostrophe
Posted 3 months ago

wow thats what it comes down to huh, he realizes what he would be missing if he took someone’s life.
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Browncoatben
Posted 3 months ago

Hope your mom doesn’t reed your writing!

Nicely done.
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Ridcully Calvert
Posted 3 months ago

That is really cool. Sort of has a “Throw momma from the train” kind of feeling, but only after you’ve read the whole thing. Well done!

LoA
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RainDance
Posted 3 months ago

Never would have seen that coming, I laughed out loud.
Hitman [Unexpected Twist Challenge]
EDBeale
Posted 3 months ago

That was freaking awesome.