Brackish Water (paint a picture challenge)

by g2 (la pianista irlandesa)

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The clouds parted, sending a shaft of light on Lynn. Tossing her disheveled chestnut ponytail over her shoulder, she paused a moment to wipe her brow. I’ve never seen anything so beautiful in such an unexpected place. Her practical hairstyle, in this light, made her seem angelic. She seemed transformed in my eyes: the tattered “Save the Whales” t-shirt became a stunning gown; the brackish delta around us metamorphed into a starlit terrace. I sighed happily.
“Jared… Jared? You alright?” she asked me after a time. Snapping out of my daze, I looked at her again. There was no terrace, no evening gown. Only a girl in a waterlogged shirt, rolled jeans and frizzed ponytail standing in ankledeep brackish water, with a lone piece of seaweed plastered to her elbow.
“Yeah… yeah, I’m fine.”

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  1. Brackish Water (paint a picture challenge)

    PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)'s Buddy Icon PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    It’s amazing what images love can put into your head. Thanks for entering.

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    NightMaiden's Buddy Icon NightMaiden

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I love the image you paint. It’s heartwarming. Lynn’s activity sounds like something I’d do, lol : )

  3. Brackish Water (paint a picture challenge)

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 2 months ago

    Cute. Sometimes reality sucks. That’s why I spend all my time in a rich fantasy life.

  4. Brackish Water (paint a picture challenge)

    Valley Fey/Pinprick's Buddy Icon Valley Fey/Pinprick

    Posted 2 months ago

    This is pretty, I totally felt the snap back to reality, haha…

    LoA

  5. Brackish Water (paint a picture challenge)

    Watween's Buddy Icon Watween

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    This is amazing. It’s so easy to picture everything you write!

  6. Brackish Water (paint a picture challenge)

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Nice imagery throughout. I especially liked the “disheveled chestnut ponytail.” You can really visualize this scene.

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