Evening Air {Unconventional Zen Master Challenge}

by PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

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The sun is painting coral streaks onto the evening clouds. A fresh wind picks up the dry leaves and swirls them in little circles across the stone floor.

He sits on the veranda, the yellowing plastic garden chair creaking under his weight, a half-smoked Benson and Hedges ultra light cigarette – the ashes drooping already – squeezed between his parched lips, Readers Digest in the left hand and a beer – the label obscured by a semi-dead cactus – quietly bubbling on a rickety, wooden table nearby. He takes a big gulp and without taking his eyes off the book he puts the bottle back on the table.

I approach cautiously, careful not to drop the present that I had handcrafted over the last few weeks. I push the brown dachshund out of the way, who then immediately starts growling at me.

He looks up and says: “The sun is the black sheep of the universe.”

I stand stunned, trying to process the information. Eventually my brain takes control of my limbs again.

I reply “Yes dad, happy fathers day” and present my gift.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Evening Air {Unconventional Zen Master Challenge}

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Cool. Totally fits in with the season given that Father’s Day is tomorrow. Nice little twist at the end as well. I love twists.

  2. Evening Air {Unconventional Zen Master Challenge}

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Wow, that was truly a cool father’s day story. dad’s kinda bitter, son mustn’t visit much.. very detailed, can see the scene in my minds eye.

  3. Evening Air {Unconventional Zen Master Challenge}

    Apostrophe 's Buddy Icon Apostrophe

    Posted 3 months ago

    wow.. kicking a dog.. not cool. Whats making pops so grouchy?? was fathers gift hand made?

  4. Evening Air {Unconventional Zen Master Challenge}

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    The sun is the black sheep of the universe. I love that line.

  5. Evening Air {Unconventional Zen Master Challenge}

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 3 months ago

    Bit of a twist on it too. Pun/double meaning to ‘sun’, maybe?

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