"Can I tell you a story?" Finished

by JMSquire

“This girl went psycho, just exploded. She hurled curses at John and Michelle and when she was done she turned to me and she tells me that I ‘am the most decent guy’ she had ever met and that I should call her some time.

You know what I said to that? I said ‘You just threw my nachos at my friends who are sitting in my car. My car, which you will not be getting back into. But I would love to call you a cab’ and she walked away, I don’t know if she called her own cab or just found some random other car full of people. That’s the end of the story.”

“That seemed like a kind of pointless story.”

“Well, the point is that you and I have it really amazing. People out there, in this mad world, they strive to find someone that they can exist with and be completely happy in the company of. You and I fit together like gears in a clock.”

“I see. So this is another one of your long winded ways of telling me you love me?”

“See, just like gears in a clock. I do love you, I always will.”

“Thank you.”

“You’re welcome.”

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. "Can I tell you a story?" Finished

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    She did explode. Wow. Crazy that she goes nuts on everyone except him. I guess that was to be expected, though.
    I liked how this story was told in an untraditional way, not as it happens but from word of mouth. This colors the story differently, somehow.

  2. "Can I tell you a story?" Finished

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Great job on the story. Still didn’t see what could be taken out of context though. I really thought there would be a line in there like “and I got right behind him and jammed it in. You should have seen his face.” You know, something like that.
    Still, this was fun, and as Ana said, the way it was presented really worked well.

  3. "Can I tell you a story?" Finished

    Freedom's Buddy Icon Freedom

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Great job on this. I really did enjoy it.

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