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The Target (Unexpected Twist Challenge)

by Watween

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He strode across the pavement, looking as confident and intimidating as a man could look. People glanced up at him as he walked past, but he paid them no mind. He was a man on a mission.
Target sighted. His dark eyes focused on the figure in the distance. Not a single thought went through his head, only the buzz of concentration. Nothing could distract him from his mission.
Even through the thick crowds, his target spotted him and crossed the street ahead. He took no mind of it and simply kept going straight, his eyes locked on the target. He shifted from follow mode to chase mode.
He came up almost parallel with the target and crossed the street. A few cars honked as he stepped off the sidewalk, but they didn’t deter him. He was within 100 feet of the target. Nothing else mattered right now except completing the mission. Less than 30 feet now. He put his hand in his coat pocket, and looked to the left to see the front of a bus right next to him and getting closer.
The target laughed.

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Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

  1. The Target (Unexpected Twist Challenge)

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 5 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    See, that’s what we call getting ‘target locked’. Tunnel vision is very bad, in driving, love, and assassination attempts.

  2. The Target (Unexpected Twist Challenge)

    g2 (la pianista irlandesa)'s Buddy Icon g2 (la pianista irlandesa)

    Posted 5 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I liked it, but I didn’t really understand the ending… maybe because I’m exhausted, but you might have to spell it out for me, watween…

  3. The Target (Unexpected Twist Challenge)

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 5 months ago

    This made me laugh. I love the twist. Very unexpected.
    Thank you very much for entering.

  4. The Target (Unexpected Twist Challenge)

    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 5 months ago

    hey i dug it was it ficlet nirvana

  5. The Target (Unexpected Twist Challenge)

    Kelli 's Buddy Icon Kelli

    Posted 5 months ago

    I totally don’t get this…

    I’m sorry

  6. The Target (Unexpected Twist Challenge)

    Ridcully Calvert's Buddy Icon Ridcully Calvert

    Posted 5 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I liked the idea. I thought that the telling of it was a bit rough, you might want to change the last paragraph to be a bit more obvious.

    It looks like you got stuck on that 1024 char limit.

    Well done, nevertheless.

    LoA

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