Bagman: Full of Surprises

by JLaughter

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Bagman: Full of Surprises

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Another damn good entry. I was hoping these two would scrap, and so far it seems to be living up to expectations.

  2. Bagman: Full of Surprises

    JLaughter's Buddy Icon JLaughter

    Posted 3 months ago

    Heh, yeah. I’ve been waiting to get these two in a fight. This was a hard piece to get into nirvana…I was WAY too descriptive in Benny’s attack, and really had to trim the heck out of it, without losing any of the straight-forward brutality of Benny’s style. I still see some awkward wording I need to go back and fix, but I’ll let it stand for now.

  3. Bagman: Full of Surprises

    KevMullins' Buddy Icon KevMullins

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Excellent fight scene and great descriptions. You did a great job of painting a mental image with this one.

  4. Bagman: Full of Surprises

    JMSquire's Buddy Icon JMSquire

    Posted 3 months ago

    Awesome intro to a fight scene. Great line thrown at the secretary.

  5. Bagman: Full of Surprises

    Browncoatben's Buddy Icon Browncoatben

    Posted 3 months ago

    The action’s really picking up!

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