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Locked Out

I was just about to close up when someone walked in, technically we were still open, so I had to serve him, damn him.

“Ah, excuse me good fellow, could I trouble you for a second.” He said, jauntily.

“Yes sir certainly, what is it I could help you with?”

“Well, it’s quite embarrassing actually, I’ve managed to lock myself out of my flat and I need several tools to obtain entry.” I realised this was going to be time consuming as he rattled of his list of equipment.

“Have you considered calling a locksmith?”

“Well, I tried to get my insurance down and installed 14 locks on my front door, all 14 keys are inside, that’s why I need so much stuff to get back in.”

“I suppose that kind of makes sense, this will cost a lot you know.”

“Well, here’s the rub, I’ve also locked my wallet in my flat and can’t pay you up front.”

“Right, look I just want to go home, I’ll come with you to your flat on the way, anything else I can help you with?”

“Yes actually, could you get these cuffs off, they’re killing me?”

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John Perkins
Posted 3 months ago

When you first introduced this guy, I immediately thought of the old man who died on the stall in “Clerks.” I think he starts his conversation with Dante in the exact same way.
Funny little twist there at the end, but now I’m left wondering if the dude is trying to rob someone else’s flat, or really wants to get into his own.
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thebetweenspace
Posted 3 months ago

I love how the ending shows us what the character’s really up to. Either that, or maybe he left his handcuffs key with the other 14 keys inside his flat.
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Ana Cristina
Posted 3 months ago

The twist made me chuckle. And that JP has a funny mind, doesn’t he? JK, “Clerks” is an awesome flick.
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PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)
Posted 3 months ago

Cute little twist, but it fits with the character.
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Jenunique
Posted 3 months ago

Comic relief! Loved the twist.
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SKermitgorf
Posted 3 months ago

Haha really unexpected twist, always love british humour.
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Mighty-Joe Young
Posted 3 months ago

crazy did you just come up with that? or did that really happen to you?if so were you the guy at the shop or just ..maybe.. good story
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.:band baby:.
Posted 3 months ago

Wow.. I kinda saw that coming.. I mean, who has 14 keys and locks ALL of them humm? lol. Nice twist though!
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ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫
Posted 3 months ago

i knew that guy was up to something .. heheh
Great stuff.
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Ridcully Calvert
Posted 3 months ago

I liked this one. Nice understated humorous twist. And the dialogue was definitely from the top drawer, I found it flowed very smoothly and believably

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