Bagman: Pandemonium

by JLaughter

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Bagman: Pandemonium

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    No way. You didn’t kill Louise, did you? Murderer. =P
    I see you found a way to bring your cop into the fold. Was not expecting her to be a woman.
    Having this dude as a character certainly came in handy for this scene. It really worked well moving between the different mini-scenes you’ve got going on right now.

  2. Bagman: Pandemonium

    PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)'s Buddy Icon PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    No, John, I think Louise is jacked in doing everything remotely. Sort of like a guardian angel. Only Benny is there in person.

  3. Bagman: Pandemonium

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    @Pyro, yes that makes sense. For some reason the Cerberus from the previous entry felt like a living entity, and I got caught up thinking when she said “time to run,” in the last one that leads right into some lady flying out of the building in here… Not sure if it was an intentional mis-direct or not, but it certainly worked on me.

  4. Bagman: Pandemonium

    JLaughter's Buddy Icon JLaughter

    Posted 3 months ago

    Nah, it was actually kind of an afterthought. I forgot about the poor “expression-practicing” secretary who was at the desk when Benny decided to throw a grenade at Ismail.
    Pyro’s right, Louise should be back at their warehouse, jacked in remotely.
    And I just really like the feel of the camera drone bits! :-D

  5. Bagman: Pandemonium

    Browncoatben's Buddy Icon Browncoatben

    Posted 3 months ago

    All caught up…you fucking compulsive addict.

  6. Bagman: Pandemonium

    KevMullins' Buddy Icon KevMullins

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    A LOL @ben. B another great piece

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