Counter Offer (summer vacation challenge)

by Mistress Elsha Hawk

My speech was excellent, the colorful pictures were pasted in place, the quoted monetary amounts were close enough approximations to be reasonable, yet Mom and Dad sat there bemused. “So what do you think?”

“I’m impressed by your effort, honey, but your Dad and I already have plans.” Mom consoled, smoothly.

“What plans?” I was suckered in.

“You’re going to spend one week with your grandma, in the city.”

“Mo-om! That’s not a vacation!” I protested.

“Don’t you like your grandma’s?” Mom played the guilt card.

“Yeah, but we’ve never gone anywhere! I just want to travel somewhere I’ve never been and have fun!”

“Maybe we can go to the water park this year.” Mom suggested.

“Okay.” I gathered my pictures and went up to my room.

Grandma’s and the water park. Well, it was better than nothing! I mused. Last year, we didn’t even swim!

“What’d they say?’ Lizzie asked me from her bedroom door.

“We’re going to stay with Grandma for a week.”

“YAY!!” Lizzie would have been excited even if we went next door.

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Counter Offer (summer vacation challenge)

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I love how Lizzie was planning for some exotic beach but then is thrilled to be going to Grandma’s. :)
    I think you forgot the word “a” right after “for” in your second-to-last sentence.

  2. Counter Offer (summer vacation challenge)

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 2 months ago

    Thanks! fixed!

  3. Counter Offer (summer vacation challenge)

    ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫'s Buddy Icon ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫

    Posted 2 months ago

    I loved it.. I just love Lizzie’s innocence! IT really came out well!

  4. Counter Offer (summer vacation challenge)

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Yeah, Lizzie’s innocent excitement was adorable.

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