Darkness Cover Me 4 (Dead Tell Tales Challenge)

by Jenunique

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The old woman’s cackle filled Renee’s ears like nails on a chalkboard. She looked up to the Rider whose face was covered with the fabled hooded cape.

“It’s time, Sweetheart,” the old woman said into Renee’s ear.

The white horse reared and when his hooves struck the pavement Renee felt herself leave her corporeal body. She lifted from the warm solidity of gravity and evanesced into the cool weightlessness of vaporous idea.

Renee tried to think but found it hard to concentrate. She managed to look around. Her own eyes stare at her mockingly, “You figure it out.”

She looked down to see wisps of translucent tendrils drifting where her legs should have been. She wanted to scream, but had no voice.

“Well, Sweetheart. I have to go home,” the phone rang, “Sounds like someone’s looking for me.”

“Hello? Yes. I’m on my way. Got a bit tied up,” she winked at the now ghostly Renee. Then walked away in her earthly body.

Renee heard her last words, “I think I have all the ancestors I’ll ever need.”

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Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Darkness Cover Me 4 (Dead Tell Tales Challenge)

    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 3 months ago

    Okay.. I got a bit carried away with the challenge… ;D

  2. Darkness Cover Me 4 (Dead Tell Tales Challenge)

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Carried away is good when the story is good!
    One small typo – in the second line, it should read whose face.
    More, please!

  3. Darkness Cover Me 4 (Dead Tell Tales Challenge)

    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 3 months ago

    Anna if you keep nit picking people might think your in love. jenunique there is nothing more awesome than being carried away(accept an mlt mutton lettuce and tomato) the story was soooooo good, i wish i was a doctor moreau freak with four arms so i could give it for thumbs up.

  4. Darkness Cover Me 4 (Dead Tell Tales Challenge)

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 3 months ago

    Took me a few reads to make sense of it, but I was a bit distracted. Great description of the shift to incorporeal. I think what threw me was the quick twist from concerned ancestor to opportunistic witch.

  5. Darkness Cover Me 4 (Dead Tell Tales Challenge)

    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 3 months ago

    I don’t mind the “nit picking.” :D (Especially when it is something as important as contraction versus possession.)

    Thanks for the comments!! :D

  6. Darkness Cover Me 4 (Dead Tell Tales Challenge)

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Wow, like THX I wasn’t expecting that twist with the ancestor stealing her body like that. How interesting. Carried away is a good thing when you’re writing (your one of my favorites writers on the site).

  7. Darkness Cover Me 4 (Dead Tell Tales Challenge)

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 3 months ago

    O man she took her body.. thats why the reaper keeps coming back for her.. creepy well told series.

  8. Darkness Cover Me 4 (Dead Tell Tales Challenge)

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    That’s messed up. Stealing someone’s body like that. Very well done little series though. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

  9. Darkness Cover Me 4 (Dead Tell Tales Challenge)

    PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)'s Buddy Icon PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Thanks Jen for posting. This series gave me goosebumps. And you are right, genealogy is addictive.

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