Red {Part 2 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}

by PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

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Red… Warm soothing red… My heart hammers sharp, slivers of excitement into my chest as I stand in the doorway. Daggers of trepidation flash in my direction. Her vermillion lips are alternately screaming rusty obscenities or wailing for deliverance. They must be silenced. I carefully slip my sweaty hand under her tense neck and plant a passionate kiss. My ears are still ringing with the screams, oh those exceptional inflaming screams. Still kissing, I slowly brush the sleeves of her lacy dress down her rosy arms until I can glimpse the coral brassiere straps.

But, she bites! Ruby razor shards of disgust pierce my brain. With scarlet vision I grab the charcoal-black duct-tape and with a sickly, scratchy twist, tear of a piece and plaster it over her mouth. Her eyes are now begging forgiveness.

The knife jumps into my hand and nauseated I start slashing. My hand turns hot and sticky with blood. Crimson droplets fall in slow-motion and congeal on terracotta tiles.

I really must stop cutting myself.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Red {Part 2 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}

    JLaughter's Buddy Icon JLaughter

    Posted 3 months ago

    Huh. That took an unexpected turn. You set up the twist very well, and I’m happy to say that you took me by surprise! I had to reread both parts twice to make sure I had it right.

  2. Red {Part 2 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}

    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 3 months ago

    as you usual you always take chances that is what i love about your stuff

  3. Red {Part 2 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 3 months ago

    Very odd. This is one twisted honeymoon. Enjoyable read though, and some great descriptions.

  4. Red {Part 2 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Interesting extra twist here. The last line, as twisted as it is, kind of made me laugh.

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