The clouds all yelped loudly

by JMSquire

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. The clouds all yelped loudly

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Where you write “an ambulance is on it’s way,” you don’t need the apostrophe in “its.”
    I almost feel bad for the operator, after Jeremy’s verbal assault. But they probably get calls like that all the time.

  2. The clouds all yelped loudly

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    His tirade sounds entirely plausible. Well done in making it believable.

  3. The clouds all yelped loudly

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I’m still loving the way the dialogue is so powerful that you almost want to laugh to shield yourself from the emotional connection to what’s really behind it. Well constructed tension, so far here.

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