Black {Part 3 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}

by PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

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Black… Soft velvety black… The daylight fades and the darkness envelopes and smothers me with a cashmere caress. My arms still pulsate with purifying pain but my legs ooze into puddles of foamy sluggishness. The image of my beautiful, creamy bride, her face still tarnished by that black smudge, wobbles and reddens as if seen through burgundy jelly. Gray gravity tugs at me and I surrender to the incessant groping. On the warm floor, between the specks of brown renewal, I curl up into a foetal position, close my exhausted eyes and await sweet, silver salvation.

Rin…

The operator picks up the telephone before it can complete a fourth chime: “Psychic Hotline you are speaking to Lynda. Why are you hurting yourself and your bride?”

The voice on the other end is soothing and reassuring: “Miss Arthrope, my name is Allen Foster and I work for TelePath Incorporated. We have received word of your um… talent. To make sure, we have created a test, which you just passed. How would you like to work for us?”

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Black {Part 3 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Interesting third installment… One question, if Lynda picked up that he was hurting himself and his bride, couldn’t she also have picked up the intentions behind his test? In the last paragraph there’s a typo. “To make sure, we have created a test”

  2. Black {Part 3 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}

    PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)'s Buddy Icon PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    Posted 3 months ago

    If the telepath is sufficiently advanced, maybe not. Thanks for pointing out the error. Corrected and nirvana regained.

  3. Black {Part 3 - Unexpected Twist Challenge}

    Ridcully Calvert's Buddy Icon Ridcully Calvert

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    OK, now that was a very good read – I loved the progression of colour, the twist in each ficlet and this extra meta-twist at the end.

    Really a superb entry into the challenge.

    LoA

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