Discoveries [Unexpected Twist Challenge]

by g2 (la pianista irlandesa)

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“Jack! Look what I found!” Lars called, half-running half-skipping down the dirt path to his friend’s house. Jack slouched in the doorway.
“Man, what d’y’want?” he asked irritably.
“Check this out!” Lars declared proudly, showing the thing he discovered. Jack looked at it.
“It’s- a rutabaga.”
“Yeah I know!” Lars shone from excitement. Jack gave his friend a frank look.
“Lar, I haven’t the foggiest idea why you get pleasure out of finding a root. You find sticks, rocks, all of which I’m ok with because they’re remotely interesting. But a rutabaga?”
“Aw, come on Jack!” Lars moaned, shoving the dirt-clumped root into his friend’s chest. “Just look at it!”
Something struck Jack odd about this stupid rutabaga. He brushed dirt off of it. He pressed it to his ear.
“Uh, Jack? You call me weird?”
“No, Lars, listen-” Both, oddly, listened to the root. A faint beeping sound came from it.
Jack was confused. “Do rutabagas usually beep?”
Lars’ eyes widened. “Do they usually have a bomb countdown timer?”

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Discoveries [Unexpected Twist Challenge]

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 2 months ago

    Well this was unexpectedly funny. I enjoyed it. Although, I have no clue what a rutabaga is. If it’s not a topping on a pepperoni, pineapple and jalepeno pizza, I’ve probably never seen it. =P
    Thank you for entering.

  2. Discoveries [Unexpected Twist Challenge]

    g2 (la pianista irlandesa)'s Buddy Icon g2 (la pianista irlandesa)

    Posted 2 months ago

    allow me to enlighten you on what is a rutabaga is: it’s basically a purplish turnip. In other words, nothing exiting.
    I’m glad I could entertain :-)

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    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    I have seen a rutabaga, though never have I seen it used in such a funny fictional twist. Nice.

  4. Discoveries [Unexpected Twist Challenge]

    Watween's Buddy Icon Watween

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Haha, I love it!

  5. Discoveries [Unexpected Twist Challenge]

    PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)'s Buddy Icon PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I looked at the list of entries and saw “The last grenade” just following yours and I sort of had a hunch this would go this way. Good twist though, although grenades and bombs only have countdown times in movies.

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    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Pyro Pyro Pyro, three third grades cant defeat the transexual megalomaniac named ‘him’, but they do it on the power puff girls. (Notice how i didn’t say they couldnt fly that is believable, but beating ‘him’ ridiculous. I love the story and i hope that Andy Warhol was wrong because i would hate to see a rash of rudabega I.E.D’s. nice story and way to take risks cause nice stay celibate.

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    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    i meant nice guys stay celibate

  8. Discoveries [Unexpected Twist Challenge]

    EDBeale's Buddy Icon EDBeale

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    That was really cute…And more than a little bit scary. I think I’ll stay away from the rutabaga from now on. Of course, I don’t even know what they look like, so I guess it wouldn’t matter either way.

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    ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫'s Buddy Icon ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    That’s one killer Rutabaga!
    i found the dialogue funny.. well written.

    @TMJY: It scares me that you know so much about Power Puff Girls… ;)

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