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Second Chances [Hauntingly Beautiful Challenge!]

It was so cold.
Emma Colton’s mind was in a haze as she stared into the light. The pain had finally subsided. But she was so tired. She rubbed at her forehead, and her hand came back slick and crimson.
Voices rang in the back of her mind.
She’s fading. Give her a 1mg epinephrine drip and charge defib to 200 Joules
Her vision went white, and before her stood a creature so beautiful, she could not have been human. Her golden locks were strands of silk limply drooped over slender shoulders. Her skin was translucent silver. A genuine, tender visage with eyes of summer twilight looked on Emma. The creature smiled.
“It is not, yet, your time Emma. You must go back,” the voice was like Beethoven’s Fur Elise.
Emma’s eyes filled with tears. Her heart soared with peace, “But I don’t want to go back.” she found herself saying.
The creature shook her head once, “Not yet. We will be here when the time comes,”
Relunctantly, tearfully, Emma nodded.
CLEAR !
The shock.
Emma gasped and then cried.
She was alive.

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Second Chances [Hauntingly Beautiful Challenge!]
THX 0477
Posted 2 months ago

Great scene and jump from the idea of the challenge, both in the haunting and in the beautiful sense.
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thebetweenspace
Posted 2 months ago

It’s not letting me rate (5 stars). I like how everything is so beautiful that she doesn’t want to go back to living. Well described scene that makes a return to normal life seem haunting.
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Mighty-Joe Young
Posted 2 months ago

my wife read this and cried she has had to be revived like seven times in her life. she said it was similar but the conversations are longer and they usually begin with a tour, sounds like my normal type of humor but she was serious.
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ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫
Posted 2 months ago

@Mighty Joe: at least it gets an emotional response, which i think is in the vain of the challenge. Unfortunately, I didn’t have room to describe the tour: Ficlet Nirvana’s a bitch sometimes :) hahaha..
I hope she enjoyed it at least…
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Ana Cristina
Posted 2 months ago

Is this a meditation on the beauty of second chances? On angels? On life itself? I think it’s all of these things. :) Beautiful. Haunting, even.
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Mistress Elsha Hawk
Posted 2 months ago

Translucent silver sounds ethereal. Great descriptions! I liked it.
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Laine P. Grey
Posted 2 months ago

Wow, I know everyone’s gonna kill me for this Twilight reference, but it made me think of Carlisle.
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Apostrophe
Posted 2 months ago

I am awestruck..I could almost see this story unfold before me.. In my mind I could almost hear the angel speak.. Awesome story.. very gripping, and true to form.. hauntingly beautiful.
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LovingYourHeartbreak♥
Posted 2 months ago

hauntingly beautiful. wow. : ]
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[pens&feathers]
Posted 2 months ago

Quite beautiful, and I agree, I liked that she was so attached to the beauty of the afterlife that she didn’t want to go back. Thanks for entering!
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Music-Hearted
Posted 2 months ago

You used so many great phrases in here… “slick and crimson”, “summer twilight”. They really enhance the mood. Great job! It was most definitely “hauntingly beautiful”.
LoA

By the way, thanks for reading and commenting my entry!
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Music-Hearted
Posted 2 months ago

You used so many great phrases in here… “slick and crimson”, “summer twilight”. They really enhance the mood. Great job! It was most definitely “hauntingly beautiful”.
LoA

By the way, thanks for reading and commenting my entry!
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Music-Hearted
Posted 2 months ago

Oops, didn’t mean to comment twice. My bad.
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ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫
Posted 2 months ago

@Music-Hearted: It was my pleasure to read your ficlet. Thanks for the kind words!