The Most Beautiful, The Most Dangerous

by RainDance

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A hauntingly beautiful face appeared beneath the surface of the water. It smiled with teeth almost unnoticeably pointed. Slowly, a hand with delicate white fingers broke through the waves and beckoned the sailor. He stared over the edge of the boat at the face of a beautiful woman. Her hair was red and probably curly, though it was wet and undulating with the ocean, so it was difficult to tell. One slender finger coaxed him towards the water, only a foot from his face.

The coy woman backed away but continued beguiling him towards her. He lowered himself into the water and swam to the woman who was now floating casually on her back in the water. A fish tail broke the surface and disappeared as quickly as it had come into view. He failed to notice the tale as he was caught in her large, grey eyes; swirling like maelstroms. With a few gentle strokes he was upon her, kissing her, submiting to the flames of passion that would lead the sailor to his watery grave.

Once in her grasp, she dragged him under.

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Average Reader Rating: 4.5 stars out of 5

  1. The Most Beautiful, The Most Dangerous

    RainDance's Buddy Icon RainDance

    Posted 3 months ago

    Just a note for John Perkins, should he read this: I wanted to put spaces in between the paragraphs, but I had to take them out so I could fit the whole thing.

  2. The Most Beautiful, The Most Dangerous

    Laine the Grey's Buddy Icon Laine the Grey

    Posted 3 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Nice, I enjoyed this a lot. Brilliant descriptions.

  3. The Most Beautiful, The Most Dangerous

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Very cool. I totally dug this.
    Two things. You’ve confused “tail” with “tale.” And in your second to last sentence, you have repeated “to the” twice in a row, like so: “submiting to the to the flames.” Remove one of those sets and you’ll have room for the line breaks. =P
    In any case. Good job. Very enjoyable ficlet.

  4. The Most Beautiful, The Most Dangerous

    Krulltar's Buddy Icon Krulltar

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Very good mermaid tale.

  5. The Most Beautiful, The Most Dangerous

    RainDance's Buddy Icon RainDance

    Posted 3 months ago

    Thanks for catching the spelling and such, all fixed.

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