Microfiction: Jennifer's Eyes

by Stovohobo

Jennifer always looked at him with that glance, and he hated it. It would make his food taste bland and paste-like. Her glance peeled him like an orange, revealing the bruised and ugly fruit underneath. He didn’t know about the power of vision until that disgusting, disgust_ed_ look speared him on the end of a stick and tossed him out. He was good at hiding before she came, before those mirrored eyes taught him to see.

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Microfiction: Jennifer's Eyes

    Storykeeper of Fae's Buddy Icon Storykeeper of Fae

    Posted 3 months ago

    I know a pair of eyes like hers. Amazingly descriptive and tauntingly tiny in volume. Awesome job.

  2. Microfiction: Jennifer's Eyes

    Laine the Grey's Buddy Icon Laine the Grey

    Posted 3 months ago

    Brilliant, you know I love ficlets that highlight the eyes.

  3. Microfiction: Jennifer's Eyes

    Ridcully Calvert's Buddy Icon Ridcully Calvert

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Wow Stovo, you really have a talent. “peeled him like an orange, revealing the bruised and ugly fruit underneath”

    That juxtaposition of sweet, sunny orange actually being bruised fruit works exceptionally well.

    Lovely, poetic stuff – and packed into such a small volume, too!

    LoA

  4. Microfiction: Jennifer's Eyes

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    It might be “microfiction,” but this short piece has so much depth to it. The imagery is fantastic.

  5. Microfiction: Jennifer's Eyes

    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Great Ficlet! I think I actually have one of those looks stored away in my basket of tricks. But, in defense of Jennifers everywhere, we don’t really mean to do it….. ;D Double stars for this one. (Of course, use of the name always helps.)

  6. Microfiction: Jennifer's Eyes

    Music-Hearted's Buddy Icon Music-Hearted

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I’m really impressed with how you were able to fit such a deep story in only a few sentences. And I LOVE this line: “Her glance peeled him like an orange, revealing the bruised and ugly fruit underneath.” Great job, really.
    LoA

  7. Microfiction: Jennifer's Eyes

    Amaster's Buddy Icon Amaster

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    As always, some good stuff from Stovohobo. This was my favorite line: “He was good at hiding before she came, before those mirrored eyes taught him to see.”

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    invisibility_disability's Buddy Icon invisibility_disability

    Posted 3 months ago

    i agree with amaster.
    amazing stuff, and the last line was fantastic. :)
    greattttttt job.
    LoA

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