F*** the wall

by Bartimaeus

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The dent on the wall only frustrates me further as the my knuckles begin to turn red. Screaming was all I could hear. Bloody, dark, hateful screaming... Whether it was from inside of me or from my ipod i couldn’t tell, but it was everywhere…

I kneeled on the bed and hit my arm as hard as I could.
Damnit you know this will only make things worse… I think as I punch the same dent in the wall as before, this time making a small hole.
It’s ok… my parents won’t look in the closet…

I can’t think, and the one hope I did have was smashed to a thousand pieces.
You heard what she said… don’t fool yourself…
Suddenly I am overcome by a blinding wave of absolute hatred and malice. I began pounding the wall over and over again until I couldn’t feel my knuckles. I yelled out into the stillness of my room, with no answer. Just an annoying air of silence that seemed to laugh at me.
As I regained my senses, music found my ears: and still you want to end your life…

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. F*** the wall

    sunshine_loves_moon's Buddy Icon sunshine_loves_moon

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    wow
    this is really good.
    probably one of the best ficlets i’ve read so far
    really good job.
    :)
    5 star ++++

  2. F*** the wall

    Apostrophe 's Buddy Icon Apostrophe

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    omg.. this story is emotionally packed. i could almost see you pounding your fist into a wall. Or the person in the story rather. Excellent descriptions. ha ha im number 14.. thats cool. Thank you!

  3. F*** the wall

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I like the raw emotion of the story. Very well done. I like how you incorporated the music in there as well. Those walls can be real assholes sometimes, you know.

  4. F*** the wall

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Very tense. The imagery is strong and the inner thoughts of the character help the reader figure out your narrator’s need for violence.

  5. F*** the wall

    penguincaptain18's Buddy Icon penguincaptain18

    Posted 3 months ago

    I completely agree with everyone, this is a great ficlet with some of the greastest imagery I’ve ever seen and some of the rawest feelings. Awesome job!

  6. F*** the wall

    Bartimaeus' Buddy Icon Bartimaeus

    Posted 3 months ago

    aww thanks guys =)
    it really makes my day to see such positive comments on my writing

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