It's Just A Bad Date

by Amyo

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It’s a bad date when he turns up hungover and dressed like an English soccer hooligan. It’s a bad date when you pay for dinner and he doesn’t even pretend to reach for his wallet. It’s a bad date when you walk him to the ferry and you’re relieved when he only kisses your cheek.

On the taxi ride home, Sally was talking her brain down from a window ledge. ‘Bad dates happen to good people,’ she told herself, but her brain was in panic mode. ‘I’m gonna end up old and withered and ALONE ’ it was shrieking at the top of its lungs. If brains have lungs?

She gave the driver a $20 note (the ride was only $14.50) and stumbled up the front steps like a drunk. She’d only had one beer.

Madison opened the front door before Sally could wrestle with her keys and the lock. She was wearing stripy pajamas. And a huge expectant grin. ‘Well?’
‘Woeful.’ Sally pushed past her.

In her bedroom she kicked off her kitten heels and sunk, face-first, onto the bed. ‘This is it, Brain,’ she thought to herself. ‘Last date ever!’

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Average Reader Rating: 4.5 stars out of 5

  1. It's Just A Bad Date

    ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫'s Buddy Icon ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Wow… total bad-date’age!!!
    But i doubt it’s her last! :)

    Great fic!

  2. It's Just A Bad Date

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Oh, man. I had a date go like that once, a blind date. It was horrible. I raised my standards after that one. So, I feel for poor Sally.

  3. It's Just A Bad Date

    Elphaba's Buddy Icon Elphaba

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    claps Ha! I absolutely love it, especially the opening.

  4. It's Just A Bad Date

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    The first paragraph was fantastic, and I can truly empathize with Sally. Bad dates suck.

  5. It's Just A Bad Date

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 2 months ago

    ouch! I agree with ALRO , it probably won’t be her last, but I think she’ll take a hiatus for a little while. :)

  6. It's Just A Bad Date

    Krulltar's Buddy Icon Krulltar

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I love the story. The question mark after “If brains have lungs” might need to changed to a period. Also, the inserted statement “(the ride was only $14.50)” seemed to slow the pace, and didn’t add to her frame of mind.

  7. It's Just A Bad Date

    charlesj's Buddy Icon charlesj

    Posted 2 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I agree with Krulltar.

    As I read this, I felt myself identifying with it. You portrayed that frame of mind very well. Good work!

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