Peripheral Evil: Part 8 Hide and Seek

by Jenunique

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Rosalyn and her mother glared at one another and Sully shifted uncomfortably as prayer was said. A round of “amens” signaled to Sully it was alright to lift his head and look anywhere other than his feet.

Rosalyn’s grip on Sully’s hand tightened and threatened to turn his fingers purple if he didn’t do something quick, so he slipped his hand as nonchalantly as he could from hers. She looked at him with a frown but by now the casket was being slowly lowered into the ground and James Jenkins was on the edge of a breakdown.

Sully gave Rosalyn a nudge, “You should go to him,” he whispered. He tried to avoid the eyes of Annette Jenkins who had turned her focus completely on the two of them since their emergence from the Church, as if her anger for them could quell the pain of losing her baby.

As Rosalyn turned to go to her father, Sully turned and walked away from the crowd. Halfway between the church and the first row of graves, black figures dashed between headstones in a heinous game of hide and seek.

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  1. Peripheral Evil: Part 8 Hide and Seek

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    That ending is what I was waiting for: another emergence of those dreaded black figures and their ominous game of hide and seek. The first paragraph has a few issues, though. In the first sentence, ‘glared’. In the second, ‘it was alright’.

  2. Peripheral Evil: Part 8 Hide and Seek

    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Oh my gawd this is good you are awesome. i knew you would bring us back your descriptive narrative is just off the lead rope it is the bees knees, the cat’s pajamas, finer than frogs hair. you rock oh yeah and i am creeped out.

  3. Peripheral Evil: Part 8 Hide and Seek

    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 3 months ago

    I think I corrected my issues, but I may have created other issues. :/

  4. Peripheral Evil: Part 8 Hide and Seek

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    It seems to me that you have a penchant for cemetery scenes. Awesome job on this one. I love how poor Mike Wazowski Sully feels incredibly awkward and tries to slip away.

  5. Peripheral Evil: Part 8 Hide and Seek

    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    annette better back i dont believe rosalyn is in the mood to play with her.lol
    @john why did you have to bring googlie bear into it?

  6. Peripheral Evil: Part 8 Hide and Seek

    Jenunique's Buddy Icon Jenunique

    Posted 3 months ago

    LoL.. I had to look up Mike Wazowski. I had forgotten about that one. I actually got the name while listening to Fiona Apple’s Sullen Girl, only somehow my character turned into a young boy and his nickname became “Sully.” (Mopey just seemed too Seven Dwarfish. ;D)

  7. Peripheral Evil: Part 8 Hide and Seek

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 3 months ago

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    @Jen, I love that song. The whole album is awesome. Very cool method of inspiration.
    @Trafalmadorian, Rare is the day when either my wife or I do not shout “Mike Wazowski” in our worst Boo imitation. It’s simply a part of my consciousness.

  8. Peripheral Evil: Part 8 Hide and Seek

    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    lol my why always goes “I dont know” like grrr from invader zim.

  9. Peripheral Evil: Part 8 Hide and Seek

    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    wife i meant lol

  10. Peripheral Evil: Part 8 Hide and Seek

    KevMullins' Buddy Icon KevMullins

    Posted 3 months ago

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    Great work Jen :)

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    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 3 months ago

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    Jenunqiue, “Sullen Girl” is one of my favorite songs. Ever. So I like Sully even more now, knowing your inspiration behind the name.

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