The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]

by John Perkins

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  1. The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 3 months ago

    I assure you, this is not autobiographical. =P

  2. The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    That’s funny and unexpected. Poor guy. You have to feel sorry for him and laugh at him at the same time. I can only think of one thing that would be more embarrassing and I dare not mention it.

  3. The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I am supremely curious as to what TBS is thinking!
    By the way, this could totally double as an entry into your Unexpected Twist challenge, because I wasn’t expecting that ending at all!

  4. The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]

    BARomero's Buddy Icon BARomero

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    This was simultaneously funny and sad… and just a little bit creepy, but I suppose that was the effect you were going for.

  5. The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]

    NightMaiden's Buddy Icon NightMaiden

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    The title fits the situation perfectly. Poor guy. XD I feel bad for chuckling. Thanks for entering! : )

  6. The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]

    KevMullins' Buddy Icon KevMullins

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Since this was a challenge you knew it wasn’t going to turn out as the guy expected… however I didn’t see this coming.
    Well written and funny, great ficlet John.

  7. The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]

    chakatreatmentson!(LoA)'s Buddy Icon chakatreatmentson!(LoA)

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    simply the most evocative and elegant narrative involving a blow-up ever-let me assure you this is not a backhanded complement or like being the smartest kid in special ed-pognant , sick and funny simultaneously

  8. The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]

    chakatreatmentson!(LoA)'s Buddy Icon chakatreatmentson!(LoA)

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    simply the most evocative and elegant narrative involving a blow-up ever-let me assure you this is not a backhanded complement or like being the smartest kid in special ed-poignant , sick and funny simultaneously

  9. The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]

    ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫'s Buddy Icon ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    just when i thought this was gonna be about his small wing-ding, you pull this out of your butt.. simply brilliant!
    Man that’s funny – that just made my day!

  10. The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    OMG I laughed out loud.. did Not see that coming was caught up in the erotic moment, thought id need a cold shower, then Pop.. sss… hysterical. You won the challenge no doubt.. yeah ur LoA material..

  11. The Sound Of Defeat [Perfect Moment… Ruined Challenge]

    Apostrophe 's Buddy Icon Apostrophe

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    no way.. the ending really takes you by surprise.. the first half is written really well. And the ending is the opposite of what your expecting.

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