Diary of a Teenage Runaway 2

by suspensetaken

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Dear Diary,

I’ve been out here for a couple of days, and my feet are already becoming weak. It’s getting harder to find food out here, and the weather is becoming harsh.

I keep a picture of my love, Ben, stacked into my backpack, and only take it out when I need courage, and when I need hope. This was one of those times..I gazed at it, as a teardrop fell gently onto the photo, creating a wet mark, close to all the other marks which had stained the close to faded away picture.

I am eating the food sparingly, its becoming scarce. I have found it is useless fishing, because the fish are always hiding into the deep sea, and I haven’t had the courage to go out there, I have been staying close to the shore, where a feeling of safety overwhelmes me.

Home, my mom, my dad, the surplus supply of food, McDonalds!, this all crossed my mind every once in a while.

But with the good, I need to remember the bad, let go of the past, and focus on the present.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Diary of a Teenage Runaway 2

    RainDance's Buddy Icon RainDance

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Good sequel. To keep the flow going better, b/c you used present tense for the most part, I might chagne “this all crossed my mind” to “this all crosses my mind.” Just a suggestion. But either way it’s very good.

  2. Diary of a Teenage Runaway 2

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted 3 months ago

    Time to find a dumpster, or a job! Even if the character has to lie about their age. :) Is it the starvation making the character repeat about the food being “hard to find” and “scarce”? I know I would be focused on the food, too, but in your story it reads redundantly. :)

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