.357 - The Haunting

by Krulltar

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what’s wrong? nothing and everything. but I don’t expect you to understand that, baby.

Cooper stumbled to the bathroom carrying the near empty bottle of Kentucky’s finest mash. The revolver hung precariously in his right hand.

hell, I don’t even understand it.

His eyes glared back at him in the bathroom mirror. damn, what a mug shot. They looked like bombed out craters. The last two days had turned him into a zombie.

He dug the muzzle deep into his temple. His finger twitched.

nothing?

He opened the cylinder. the primer’s dimpled. Hell of a time for a misfire, he thought.

His hand trembled as he closed the cylinder. Russian roulette isn’t a game I like playing, but let’s see fate do that twice.

Cooper winched at the sound of the firing pin hitting the bullet. damn, fate is good. The gun skidded across the bathroom floor.

“Mommy says it’s not your time.” the small voice resonated off the bathroom tiles. “She says you have to avenge us.”

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. .357 - The Haunting

    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted 3 months ago

    Owowowoo…that last line really made me mentally rub my hands together in a ficlety, seriesy kinda way. Awesome. And I like how you may have referenced back to “that night.”

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    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Wow, that last line takes the story to a whole new arena of psychological intrigue. I love it!

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    ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫'s Buddy Icon ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Ya.. i love the ending.. very moody in an evil, innocently-sinister sorta way!
    Very cool sequel.

  4. .357 - The Haunting

    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Agree with all. The ending really made this. Good sequel.
    I think you may have misspelled “trembled” in the third to last paragraph.

  5. .357 - The Haunting

    KevMullins' Buddy Icon KevMullins

    Posted 3 months ago

    freaking awesome ending great work

  6. .357 - The Haunting

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Very creepy. Nicely done.

  7. .357 - The Haunting

    Browncoatben's Buddy Icon Browncoatben

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Nicely done! I wasn’t planning on a supernatural or haunting direction for this story, but I love where you took it. I’d even be very interested in seeing where you take this thread, if you want to continue it.
    This was really, really chilling.

  8. .357 - The Haunting

    gemminx's Buddy Icon gemminx

    Posted 3 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Nice way to crank up the internal conflict.

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    JLaughter's Buddy Icon JLaughter

    Posted 3 months ago

    Very cool, Krulltar. Gave me goose-bumps!

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