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Oh and You

by penguincaptain18

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I need light,
to make my world bright.
I need air,
to take care.
I need water,
to make me stronger.
I need food,
to fix my mood.
Oh, and I need you.

I want a car,
to take me far.
I want a bubble,
to save me trouble.
I want a pool,
to keep my cool.
I want a dove,
to show some love.
Oh, and I want you.

I like cats,
to get the rats.
I like fights,
to show my might.
I like carts,
to have all their parts.
I like dummies,
to be wrapped like mummies.
Oh, and I like you.

I dream of a place,
where I can get some space.
I dream of a book,
that really makes you look.
I dream of a store,
that isn’t a bore.
I dream of a sill,
that looks out to the hills.
Oh, and I dream of you.

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Oh and You
Ana Cristina
Posted 3 months ago

I love how lyrical this is. Really lovely. And how the “you” is almost a playful afterthought, remembered only after all the other necessities have been taken care of.
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penguincaptain18
Posted 3 months ago

I am not a poet. I know this is horrific and I probably should never write poetry again but I had to get it out of my system. Sorry.
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Ana Cristina
Posted 3 months ago

Why the heck are you apologizing? This was really good! You should write poetry more often, in fact.
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John Perkins
Posted 3 months ago

Definitely not horrific. It was actually a very fun read. Sure it’s not going to get compared to Frost or Poe or anything, but their stuff is rarely fun to read. I loved the, “oh, yeah I totally forgot, you’re kinda cool too.”
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Writer4Life00nj
Posted 3 months ago

This was really good. I agree with John Perkins, it was a fun read. I can totally relate and even if I didn’t say that I’m sure you would of known (:

Good Job!
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Smile4life!
Posted 3 months ago

Yes, I can totally relate to this, I’m sure a lot of people can! Great Job!
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Mask By The Moon
Posted 3 months ago

This is great, I don’t know why you thought it was terrible. It stayed almost songlike and I like the “Oh, and yeah, you. You’re cool.” Sounds like something my friend’s boyfriend wrote for her.(Not accusing you of plagarism, just pointing out the coincidence.)
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XxjerseyxgirlxX
Posted 3 months ago

I really like this poem. Good job!
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PantherStar10
Posted 3 months ago

OMG I love this poem!!! I wish I could rate it 10 stars!!! I read it 3 times now

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penguincaptain18

Trapped in a limbo of indecision

AT LONG LAST I’VE MADE IT TO 100 FICLETS!!!!
Now to start the long journey to 200…

Hello everyone! I like to write. I guess that’s why I’m here on the ever wonderful Ficlets. Writing really is the best way to deal with all those bottled up feelings. Ficlets is the best place to do that because really no one knows what they heck you’re talking about and isn’t going to go around school spilling all your secrets. I also love the way that you can just publish random segments of a story that might pop into your head and see where they can go.

Comments, notes, prequels/sequesl are all greatly appreciated. I love signing on and seeing I’ve got a new comment or a new note. It just makes me SO happy :)

School’s started! Very exciting stuff happening now but lots of work. Feels good to be back and seeing all my people again.

A little about myself, I’m now a senior in high school (excited and scared out of my mind), I have 3 siblings all younger. I have 3 cats and a fish who absolutely refuses to die (he’s going to be 5 this summer). I think he’s a hitman for the mob the cats run in our neighboorhood. Most (but not all) of my Ficlets are some how tied to the same guy (it gets obvious after a while). Really helps to move on when you just write about all the frustrations :) Now most of my ficlets will probably be about a new guy. Lol, I’m a teenage girl. What else am I going to write about :P

I’m the executive secretary of the band at my school. I play alto sax and bass clarinet. I used to play alto clarinet but our new director didn’t want to use it this year :( I can be REALLY random sometimes and I think I may be a bit crazy (at least that’s what everyone tells me. I’m not sure though).

Note to everyone; if a crazy old lady tries to be the president of any type of booster association for any activity make sure that she isn’t. She will ruin EVERYTHING. Just in case it ever happens to any one else.

If I post a comment multiple times I’m saying sorry in advanced. My computer is ridiculously slow sometimes and forces me to press the button 5 million times. If not it comes to life and eats the closest thing made of rubber. Or is it plastic? Anyways I’m very sorry for the random comments that may or may not be posted several times.

6/4/07 – 300 Comments (Still only 30 Ficlets)
6/24/07 – 400 Comments (I made it to 45 Ficlets woo hoo!)
6/30/08 – 500 comments (almost 80 Ficlets)
7/6/08 – 700 comments (where did 600 go? lol)
8/13/08 – 800 comments (so close to 100 Ficlets)
9/14/08 – 900 comments (still really close to 100 Ficlets)
9/20/08 – 100 Ficlets (YAY!!!!!)
9/26/08 – 1000 comments (woo! commenting-holic!)

My Series
Janice and Kyle Series: My current series. Follows a teenage writer as she goes through the trials and tribulations of life (don’t that sound familiar ;) )
http://ficlets.com/stories/33258

The Band Incident: My first real series. Also my first completed one. Yay! Most say its like a band soap opera and if you happen to know me you might just find yourself in it :)
http://ficlets.com/stories/19392

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Published on July 04, 2008.

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