Superstar Singer

by Everyoneluvs2write

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It was open Mic night down at the school. I couldn’t convince my self to sing. I knew that I was good, but I couldn’t sing in front of my school friends, could I?
I decided to check it out, since my best friend Hayley was singing.
I got there and the gym was decorated beautifully. There was a stage, balloons, streamers, and banners that said, “Open Mic Night”. I saw Hayley by the refresment table and walked over to her.
“Hey! Are you nervous?”
“A little, but not really! I’m excited!”
“Well it’s a good thing I didn’t sign up! I wouldn’t have been able to do this!” Haley smiled.
“You’re a great singer though!
I shook my head. Hayley smiled wider. What was she up to?
“Ok! May I have everyones attention!”
It was Mr. Borris, our music teacher.
“Thank you all for coming! I’m sure it’s going to be a great night!”
I turned to Hayley, but she wasn’t there. I guess she went backstage with the other proformers.
“Ok, anyway lets get on with the show! Our 1st proformer is Selena Gatsby!
Oh God. That was me!

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  1. Superstar Singer

    ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫'s Buddy Icon ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫

    Posted 2 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Being a musician myself, I connect to the protagonist in this ficlet. The butterflies before your first song is the reason, we singers, play music. Conquering the fear is half the thrill.

    I have one lil critique however.
    In this sentence:
    I knew that I was good, but I couldn’t sing in front of my school friends, can I?

    you switch from past-tense to present tense. I suggest using ”..could I?” instead of ”..can I?”
    But other than that – it reads nicely.

  2. Superstar Singer

    Writer4Life00nj's Buddy Icon Writer4Life00nj

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    This is a good story. It needs a sequel. Keep writing (:

  3. Superstar Singer

    penguincaptain18's Buddy Icon penguincaptain18

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I have to agree with Alro. For us performers half of the fun and joy you get is conquering the jitters that hit you just as you are about to perform. I also agree that that part might sound better as “could I?”. Besides that its a great first Ficlet! Great job!

  4. Superstar Singer

    Smile4life!'s Buddy Icon Smile4life!

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    yea i like it

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